tfw sum1 posts to the alt lit gc a tweet shittalking a poem

the tweet:

the poem:

the twitter thread that prompted the tweet:

paul’s thoughts:

- august typed and sent "prioritizing 'authenticity' feels like a misguided"... i typed but didn't send "i'm like okay with prioritizing authenticity, but it feels more like an internal standard for an artist to hold themself to? that said i've def shittalked art that i view to be phony. but in this instance HARD RESET is using authenticity as a weaselword so as to vent about his own sexual neuroses lol"

- "it's just prose w arbitrary line breaks" def the most tired empty shittalk on poetry that's unforch infinitely recycled by dum dums

- i think smut is cool and i find the puritan moralism of HARD RESET MAG to be loathsome

- the take that "the poem was written to induce jealousy in her current bf" is def deranged pathetic jealous bro shit

- that said writing abt yr sex life do be thorny as fuck and there are lots of ethical questions to consider... so i suppose HRM is locating something... for example, i'm in a serious relash and i would not ever UNDER ANY CIRCUMSTANCE send someone i used to get with a poem about loving their sex... in the context of my relash that would be a v shitty thing for me to do...

- that said idk nuthin abt this gal, her bf, or their situ when she sent this tobias bro the poem about him dicking her down... mb bf was nutting while she composed the DM to tobias???

- i'm generally allergic to RETVRN style critiques abt how contemporary culture has fallen, but i find them xtra annoying wrt poetry

- i actually like the poem, i think it's a pretty good poem about getting with someone who you love to fuck

- there's a bit of an energy like, influencerwave "projecting to the world how perfect my magical life is"... idk i'd say the poem is more than 5% annoying, but for me it's not annoying enough for me to be overall annoyed by it, lol

- once it moves past the boning to the post coital brownie gnoshing the poem is basically terrible tho lol... the double whammy of "as if you didn't earn the whole tray" and "as if i didn't just watch you enjoy dessert after dessert" v v corny and tragically undermines the poem

- just to further elaborate on that last point, basically it's just a straight up poem about getting dicked down, and it feels pretty real to me, but once the focus shifts to the titular brownies, the poem is no longer aboux sex, it's about "celebrating how i the poet curated a perfect sex experience"

- basically the sex part of the poem feels like it's being written to communicate a feeling to the YOU aka the tobias bro who makes her nut like crazy

- the brownies part of the poem feels like it was written by the poet for the poet, like a self-indulgent exercise in transforming lived experience into shareable content

- that said i do like the title and the "waiting for the brownies to cool" mise en scene

paul’s edit of the poem: